When I Say My Heart

[ScreenDoor_]

does anyone know of an email or snail mail way to get a hold of jeff or sue?

 

We'll see if i'll be taken to the gallows on this one, but I finished my adaptation of Tweedy's poem When I Say My Heart, I feel like the easiest way to link directly to it is myspace so go check it out and tell me what you think.

 

http://www.myspace.com/malacefinn

 

 

here are the words again:

 

When I Say My Heart

 

I mean

an emergency

worse than a clarinet

 

or an old man who just won't

stand out of the way

 

I don't mean a parking lot

but the pretty twisting oil slick

 

the waving arms

of awful drinking

 

false teeth

 

an unpopular child

on a swing set

or the least wanted crayon

 

sometimes I mean

a foil moon

 

checkpoint charlie

or a ghost

 

or sitting duck

[entropy]

I was really, really worried and frantically hoping I wouldn't have to make up something nice to say.

 

Turns out, you did a really, really nice job. I mean that, seriously. It's wonderfully understated, and I'm really digging the rhythm. As a big fan of Adult Head and as horribly "protective" of everything Jeff ever comes out with, I can say that it's a lot of fun.

 

Also, you've got some sweet, sweet as tunes up on that page, honestly. Big fan. Keep up the good work.

[ScreenDoor_]

Thank you so much, I was so afraid the thread was just going to get lost, so it really means a lot to me that someone listened. Again thank you so much for the pleasant review.

[mpolak21]

That was wonderful man. I've always wanted to hear that poem with music behind it, good work

 

--Mike

[tongue-tied]

very good

[ScreenDoor_]

does anyone know how I could get it to Jeff?

[HungryHippo]

whoa, that's excellent! thank you for sharing it

[ScreenDoor_]

thanks to you guys who listened and told me what you thought. If anyone continues to read this, give me comments/criticisms because those are always good. thanks guys!